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Mad Murdock

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The Minion Army | The Original
« on: March 12, 2014, 02:52:04 AM »
If you would like to join in the Minion Ranks. Please PM me for information 
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Green-Army/Heer, Yellow-Air Force/Luftwaffe, Blue-Navy/Marine, Red-War Purple-Other

Contents
Pg. 1 = The Minion Army – A forum Fic

Pg. 1 = Ditzy and Skully in the Minion Army 

Pg. 2 = Parzival's Invention (3 Parts) 

Pg. 3 = Howlin' Mad Murdock 

Pg. 5-11 = The Enemy Strikes (10 Parts&PostCredit Scene)

Pg. 12 = Weapon 53 (10 Parts)  *Texan*

Pg. 16 = Origins: German Werewolf (2 parts so far) Paused

Pg. 18-21 = Basically, Welcome to Hell (9 Parts)

Pg. 22 = A Christmas Letter

Pg. 23 = She's a Softie
               Dear Dad


Pg. 23 = All Hallows Eve

Pg. 25 = Snore War  (One shot)

Pg. 25 = Murder on the Rolling Seas
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The Minion Army – A forum Fic
 
Introduction
 
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Part One
 
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Part Two
 
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Ditzy and Skully in the Minion Army

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« Last Edit: January 14, 2015, 04:42:41 AM by MsMadMurdock »
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Re: The Minion Army - Forum Fiction
« Reply #1 on: March 12, 2014, 05:21:24 AM »
Yay! I'm a epic sergeant!
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Re: The Minion Army - Forum Fiction
« Reply #2 on: March 12, 2014, 06:53:29 AM »
Ohhhhh I like this :D



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Re: The Minion Army - Forum Fiction
« Reply #3 on: March 12, 2014, 07:13:11 AM »
Oh wow, this is in second person pov. *reads intensely*

A few small typos and bit of wordiness, but this is interesting, Murdock. :D At first I thought this was about the Minions from Despicable Me, due to your avatar. xD
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« Reply #4 on: March 12, 2014, 07:33:53 AM »
Oooh nice Murdock! I believe second person is the hardest point of view when writing for an audience (or so they say) because you have to be a range of different personalities and so on. And you've done it perfectly! : )

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« Reply #5 on: March 12, 2014, 07:49:25 AM »
Ohhlll. Quite Interesting. 2nd person too.
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« Reply #6 on: March 12, 2014, 08:28:30 AM »
Thank you guys! I'm glad you like it ;D
(It's based on the Minion Army that GW came up with. Nothing in common with Gru's lil yellow fellers xD )
 
Dregran, I see how you would have thought it was Despicable Me related :D
Yes, I thought it might have gotten a bit wordy..

Grace, Yes indeed, I found it a little difficult as I haven't properly written this way before. But I'm glad that it turned out ok :)

Parzival, Haha, you're an excellent Sgt in the fic :)


The next parts that'll pop up will be random stories from a select range of soldiers within the army, German Werewolf's idea :)
I don't think that I'll write them in second view though...
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« Reply #7 on: March 12, 2014, 12:36:05 PM »
This is pretty neat.  ;D

This is probably nitpicking, but generally the Army, Navy and Air Forces are different organisations and you have to apply to each one individually. They each have their own recruitment processes so the GW picking who goes where part was a bit jarring. I was also confused as to where they were in their training. They hadn't yet been recruited into either of the organisations, but it's stated that their training was beginning. In the Army (not sure about the other two) you do a two day selection course and have a first choice of your job as well as backup choices in case you don't get the right marks. After that, all recruits do fourteen weeks of basic training, followed by six months of phase II training in their specialist fields. It strikes me as odd that these people would start training before knowing what their job role would be.

I'm sure it doesn't affect your story in any way, it's just something I found a bit confusing.
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« Reply #8 on: March 12, 2014, 03:55:38 PM »
Damn cliffhanger! What place have I been chosen for? D:
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« Reply #9 on: March 12, 2014, 06:43:49 PM »
ETGuy, I understand your confusion.
It's interesting to now know how long the actual training goes for, as you've said. I know that each part (navy, army and airforce) are different to each other and are definitley not how this fiction says they are. I grew up with war movies,  I know its not the same as experiencing it, but I understand.
I wrote it this way because GW said that this is how her Minion Army works. Its completley fictional and magical based.
I hope it doesn't offend you  :-[

Ditzy, heehee I'm glad you enjoyed it.  If you would like to be part of this story/Minion Army, let German Werewolf know and she'll assign you a position :) then let me know what your rank is and I shall get to writing ;D
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« Reply #10 on: March 12, 2014, 06:50:43 PM »
Ahh, I don't mind if I'm not in it :P
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« Reply #11 on: March 12, 2014, 07:05:09 PM »
Aw I would have loved to have you in it  ;D
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« Reply #12 on: March 12, 2014, 07:32:52 PM »
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« Reply #13 on: March 12, 2014, 07:41:25 PM »
Imma write something anyway ;D
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« Reply #14 on: March 12, 2014, 07:56:03 PM »
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