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« on: May 10, 2014, 03:34:28 AM »
Well, I still need to finish the first part, but here's a preview. It's a scene that will eventually come up in the story. And hopefully the other characters will make more sense to you as the story goes on to get to that point.



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« Reply #1 on: May 11, 2014, 09:25:59 PM »
Ooh! I'm intrigued. Please continue. xD
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« Reply #2 on: May 11, 2014, 11:16:28 PM »
Maybe (now watch it won't happen) I'll try and finish the first part. Providing I don't get wrapped up in Minecraft.
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« Reply #3 on: May 11, 2014, 11:37:07 PM »
I like it, very interesting  :) Hope you get the chance to continue

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« Reply #4 on: May 12, 2014, 08:33:50 AM »
No pressure.
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« Reply #5 on: May 17, 2014, 04:46:23 AM »
Okay, here it is. The first part.

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« Reply #6 on: May 17, 2014, 02:39:55 PM »
I really enjoyed that! Well done  :)

Poor Gretel  :( I liked seeing Jack as an actual bad guy though, personally I don't like him as the misunderstood protagonist figure.

Whenever you get the time for Part 2, I will definitely be reading it


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« Reply #7 on: May 17, 2014, 07:14:13 PM »
I really love the fact that you can make a fight that long and still have it be interesting. I've never been able to do that. And I'm already looking forward to part two. Well done! :D
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« Reply #8 on: May 17, 2014, 08:15:43 PM »
Thank you all!

Part two may not come out for a really long time unless I actually have a random time when everything just flows together as I write it. I already have thought of how to start it, but now I am trying to way my options on where to go with this. Yet, I do have an overall plot to the whole. The question of how many part this is going to be is how I flow things together, how detailed I get into things, and what I use to get to the major events in the story.
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« Reply #9 on: May 17, 2014, 08:23:10 PM »
We'll see, I guess. ^^
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« Reply #10 on: May 17, 2014, 08:28:42 PM »
I totally agree with Andro by the way, the fight scene stayed interesting all the way through, despite the length, which is impressive

I frequently start something then find that all my creative juices dry up and nothings coming together or flowing right. Like Stickyrie, right now, is stalled badly. But I just thought I'd let you know that if you do get into the zone in a few weeks/months time, you've got readers who want it  :D

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« Reply #11 on: May 17, 2014, 08:31:46 PM »
I frequently start something then find that all my creative juices dry up and nothings coming together or flowing right. Like Stickyrie, right now, is stalled badly.
That was the same issue for finishing this part up. Same with the other like three, four stories I have started.


But ... only time will tell went the next part is up. And how many more fights there are.
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« Reply #12 on: May 17, 2014, 08:33:10 PM »
We'll wait patiently until then.
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« Reply #13 on: June 01, 2014, 01:29:53 AM »
Yes. Providing I don't start anymore stories to hinder me in the mean time.

Sorry guys. Writer's block. I have conflicting things with the SP setting.
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« Reply #14 on: June 01, 2014, 07:22:56 PM »
Damn. Writer's block is annoying.
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