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Re: Sanctuary Submissions
« Reply #90 on: January 27, 2017, 05:13:59 AM »
Who's responsible for the Americans sanctury
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Re: Sanctuary Submissions
« Reply #91 on: January 27, 2017, 05:15:06 AM »
It doesn't matter where we go, there's always someone that doesn't agree with us.

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Re: Sanctuary Submissions
« Reply #92 on: January 27, 2017, 11:57:14 PM »
Change the Argentine one, I don't own it.
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« Reply #93 on: January 29, 2017, 05:20:41 AM »
edited the russian sanc.

- the staff have names, not completed profiles, so i didn't add them in case I changed them before uploading.
- The Keep is it's own special thing and is relevent to another character, so highly likely it'll become it's own profile.
- And because quite a few people don't know, or haven't gone back to look, the House stuff was originally made by Eoin as part of his Sanctuary. I kept it around because it is neat and throwback of sorts.
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Re: Sanctuary Submissions
« Reply #94 on: January 29, 2017, 10:33:39 AM »
Once you add in those names we talked about, and take away the extra centre code, you have an approval from me :)

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Re: Sanctuary Submissions
« Reply #95 on: February 03, 2017, 07:11:13 PM »
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- There is a lot of content that you allude to, but do not define, explain, or as far as I can tell, have the content for it up. Do you intend to explain things like the Madrodawn Alliance/Nighyme Alliance? The Unspoken? Vorchevsky? Will these become future creations, or feature in a short story? I would like to see them in more detail, so we might have a more defined idea of what we’re reading.

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Re: Sanctuary Submissions
« Reply #96 on: February 07, 2017, 04:49:40 AM »
Made many changes, including the ones offered, and added a few more paragraphs.

- the alluded to content... You're right in that they will become content in the future. I made the Sanctuary first, as, to me, it ties all of the other things together.
There's also a fair bit of Great House stuff already scattered around the forum, a lot of it is from the original Sanctuary which I thought was too good and complete to waste.

- The Keep. Intended as a profile. Along with the Unspoken.
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Re: Sanctuary Submissions
« Reply #97 on: March 07, 2017, 06:50:12 AM »
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- There are many instances where I find you’ve started a new sentence where it should be a continuation of the previous one, or that you’ve strung two sentences together with a comma. Be sure to always read back through your writing to try and avoid these mistakes. I’m not a big fan of the short sentences you seem to favour, but you convey the information needed, so I won’t make too big of an issue of it.
- I like the direction that this is taking. A few more corrections, and this is good to go.

- I would like to apologise for the amount of time it took for me to complete this review. I won't make it a regular occurrence.

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Re: Sanctuary Submissions
« Reply #98 on: April 09, 2017, 07:48:21 AM »
i've done the edits.
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« Reply #99 on: April 09, 2017, 10:16:20 PM »
Could you repost it? There are a fair few versions posted in previous pages.
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« Reply #100 on: April 10, 2017, 02:07:35 AM »
ok.

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Re: Sanctuary Submissions
« Reply #101 on: July 10, 2019, 02:41:04 AM »
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2/2, previous approval and updated to reflect Dock’s review. We’ll get it posted/stickied tomorrow
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Re: Sanctuary Submissions
« Reply #102 on: July 10, 2019, 02:50:17 AM »
And posted up! (if you wanted to send it in Flint, let me know, we can sort it out, no biggyyy)
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